BAND 4.5 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLE: ADDRESSING ACCOMMODATION ISSUES AT A CONFERENCE TO IMPROVE FUTURE BUSINESS TRIPS

All General Writing Task 1 Samples / Band 4.5

You recently attended a conference in a different city and found that the accommodation provided by your company had several issues that negatively impacted your stay. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, include the following: 1. Introduce the purpose of your letter 2. Describe the issues you faced with the accommodation 3. Explain the effects of these problems on your experience at the conference 4. Suggest possible solutions or improvements for future events

Essay Sample

Hi dear Smit
I'm Math Damone which work in your company in sale section, as you know for getting promotion in every position of job you should participate in some course. In this case I attended in a conference in Chicago which far away of my home and have to stay here for tow nights. Unfortunately this Hotel that I'll stay in not appropriate for this issue. I spoke to the head of Hotel about the noise of the street, because my room is in the street side and I can't concentrate on job in addition there in no toilet, therefore absolutely it can affected on my conference and the process of my learning. Dear Math according to the situation I ask you to change may Hotel and attention those issues for new accommodation. Hope that I can pass the course and be useful to your compony and the future of company.
Thank you so much
your sincerely