BAND 7.5 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLE: COMPARATIVE ANALYSIS OF CANADIAN WORKFORCE IN MAJOR INDUSTRIES 1850 VS 2020

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The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay Sample

Overall, whilst the proportion of the workforce for the agriculture/fishing industry almost vanished over the given period, this figure for the services industry soared dramatically.
The percentage of the Canadian workforce for agriculture/fishing in 1850 was 22%, it decreased to merely 1% in the year 2020. In contrast, the figure for the services industry went from 33% to an overwhelming 81% over the given period. This makes the services industry the main lead of Canada's economy in the year 2020.
The two contrary trends make the services industry's workforce account more than 80 times higher compared to that of the agriculture/fishing industry.
The manufacturing industry saw a large downfall between the years 1850 and 2020. Its workforce proportion went from 36% in 1850 to only 9% in 2020. The remaining 2 major industries of Canada didn't see any large change. With the construction industry from 5% to 8% and the energy/water industry from 3% to 1%.