BAND 7.5 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLE: ANALYSIS OF CANADIAN WORKFORCE TRENDS IN MAJOR INDUSTRIES FROM 1850 TO 2020

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The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay Sample

The supplied bar chart provide information on the percentage of Canadian workforce in five different industries in the years 1850 and 2020.
It is noticeable that, the proportion of workforces in services and construction industries had an rising trend and in the fields of manufacturing, agriculture/fishing, and energy/water experienced a sharp decrement.
In the year 1850, services and construction industries accounted for 33% and 5% of workforce, respectively. It can be seen that, there was a significant climb from 33% to 81% in services workforce from 1850 to 2020. Moreover, construction industry slightly rose to 8% in 2020. It is also seen that, in 2020, services had the largest percentage.
On the contrary, the information in the bar graph illustrates that both manufacturing and agriculture/fishing sectors drastically dropped to less than 10 percent over the period. Energy/water industry began with 3% in the year 1850 and culminated in 1% in 2020. On the whole, all three industries including manufacturing, agriculture/fishing and energy/water had a downward trend which means that the percentage of workforce in these industries declined, although in 1850 manufacturing had the largest workforce percentage.