BAND 7.0 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLE: ANALYSIS OF CANADIAN WORKFORCE DISTRIBUTION IN MAJOR INDUSTRIES: 1850 VS 2020

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The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay Sample

The bar chart illustrates the amount of people who worked in 5 different major industries in Canada between 1850 and 2020.
It is clear that the percentage of workforces in services major in 2020 had the highest rate, and the amount of people who worked on energy/water and agriculture/ fishing was constantly 1% in 2020.
Looking into more details, the percentage of Canadian workforces in manufacturing major was 36% in 1850 which dropping sharply to 9% in 2020. By contrast the percentage of services major employees was 33% in 1850 which increased dramatically to 81% in the last decade. In 1850 people who worked on agriculture/ fishing was 22% which we can that had fallen steeply to 1%. However, the percentage of construction workers stayed moderate from 5% to 8% between 1850 and 2020 which is the same statistic in energy/water.
Overall, there was a downward trend in three different workforces majors with an exception in services and construction percentage of workers between 1850 and 2020.